REFLECTION FROM LAST PITCH
My last pitch received favorable reviews from my peers. I am very happy to day that I
accomplished my goal of using less and less forceful hand motions. It is still
something that I have to think about toning down, but the more excited I get
the more I like to use my hands. This less use of my hands also caused another
piece of feedback to come to light. One of my reviewees thought that my excitement
started to dwindle toward the middle and end of my pitch. The combination of my
more direct and sincere message, my fewer hand motions, and constant thinking
regarding those hand motions may have resulted in this lack of energy. I will
need to improve in this area.
accomplished my goal of using less and less forceful hand motions. It is still
something that I have to think about toning down, but the more excited I get
the more I like to use my hands. This less use of my hands also caused another
piece of feedback to come to light. One of my reviewees thought that my excitement
started to dwindle toward the middle and end of my pitch. The combination of my
more direct and sincere message, my fewer hand motions, and constant thinking
regarding those hand motions may have resulted in this lack of energy. I will
need to improve in this area.
WHAT DID I CHANGE
For the third and final pitch (yay!) I decided to share my story; the story that started it
all. I wanted it to be a true story, but not something that was too serious. I
often laugh at myself every time I tell the story because it would be something
that I was too lazy to do something about. I tried to still keep those hand
motions at a minimum, but I still might be struggling to find the right
balance. I was happy to say though this pitch took the least amount of time
than the other two and I did not have to write a script down. I still caught
myself pausing to think of what to say, but I think it flowed well. I still am
not entirely comfortable in front of the camera, only because I do not want to
hear myself afterwards. But that is something I will just have to get over.
often laugh at myself every time I tell the story because it would be something
that I was too lazy to do something about. I tried to still keep those hand
motions at a minimum, but I still might be struggling to find the right
balance. I was happy to say though this pitch took the least amount of time
than the other two and I did not have to write a script down. I still caught
myself pausing to think of what to say, but I think it flowed well. I still am
not entirely comfortable in front of the camera, only because I do not want to
hear myself afterwards. But that is something I will just have to get over.
Overall, I've seen a tremendous amount of improvement throughout your three elevator pitches. Your balance of hand gestures and enthusiasm was natural and worked well. I also really enjoyed the story that you gave and thought it brought more emotion to your pitch. It was an effective hook and allowed you to illustrate the problem using your own personal experience.
ReplyDeleteWow you improved so much on this last pitch. You seemed to really just flow when talking. I really enjoyed the story and It kind of caught my attention early on and helped me maintain interest. I believe you having experiences with allergy issues makes you have really strong interest in helping others that may run into similar situations. There is definitely potential in your service idea and with your drive I believe that you could be very successful
ReplyDeleteI think you've improved so much since your last few pitches. However, one thing that I noticed in your reflection is you wanting to use your hands less and while I do agree that too many hand movements can distract from a presentation, I also don't think you should take away from how you naturally talk. For example, if you naturally talk with your hands then continue to do so, just make sure your hand movements aren't all over the place.
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