Thursday, October 19, 2017
Assignment 17A: Elevator Pitch 2
Reflection
One of the pieces of feedback that I received from my last Elevator pitch was that I should limit my hand motions. I do have to say that this is something that people will tell me to do a lot. It is really funny because I actually have really really think about it. I am just a natural hand talker, it runs in the family. My parents always joke that it's our Italian side coming out. There were also comments about the energy of my pitch, I tired to have a good balance of high, but not too high, and I believe that I accomplished that.
Changes
While filming this elevator pitch, I tired to focus on calming my hand motions down. It was a very difficult task, but I think I did a better job. I, at least, made the motions less severe and intense than the last pitch. I also tried to come from a different place for the introduction of my pitch and start with a serious topic of the symptoms. I also apologize for the awkward transition toward the end of the pitch, I messed up the end and I tired to edit it out and it was not accomplished well. (This will not happen for the 3rd pitch)
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Hey Lauren, after reading your feedback I think that you did a good job of fixing the issues discussed. Your hand movement was not too much. I think hand movement is important to an extent so it was nice that you did not eliminate it all together. My only comment to you would be to seem more excited all the way throughout. You start off passionate but seem to get a little stoic near the middle to end. Maybe throw in a few more smiles along the way!
ReplyDeleteHi Lauren, I thought this pitch was very well done. Your level of enthusiasm was definitely appropriate for the type of pitch and I liked the level of detail that you had regarding your allergy testing service. I was able to get a clear understanding of your idea and you delivered it concisely as well. Overall, great post and awesome improvement between pitches!
ReplyDeleteCompared to your first pitch I could definitely see a reduction of hand motion and believe that it actually was a good amount this time around. You never want to be sitting still the entire pitch. I believe that energy is key to be a good speaker and sense you have a serious topic I believe that your energy was ample for the topic.
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